Contamination in Baños de la Encina
Baños is, actually, an ecological paradise in the middle of a factory area. Really, there are not serious pollution problems in our zone, but if we regard other next villages, we will realize that “contamination” not only means tons of wastes, rubbish or poisoned rivers and lakes.
Bailén is a bigger town near to Baños de la Encina. There, people live thanks to ceramic and brick factories. It is ten kilometers far from Baños but, however, we can see smoke clouds from our homes. Sky is dirty in Bailén: toxic gases cover the village and do not allow people see the shiny sun.
On the other hand, our sky is neat and our Rumblar River and its marsh are also very well protected. But not all is good in the village due to, mainly, the widespread crop: the olive. Olives are frail trees that need a lot of chemical products, like fertilizers, disinfectants and others so-called needful products. Really, these toxic treatments do not damage the harvest, they harm to us. Allergy is a disease that expands quickly thanks to these products. According to last researches, about 69% of Jaén inhabitants have some kind of allergy related with olive toxic substances. Truly, allergies are not caused by these treatments, but they influence in sakes and multiply the effects several times.
Certainly, olives cannot live nowadays without these treatments. Producers wish health in their plantations and big harvest, and it only can be obtained by toxic products.
Anyway, it is not our major threat. An important chemical company called “Fertiberia” desires to install a plant in Baños. The corporation makes solid fertilizers that are frequently used by us, but their manufacture also makes tons of toxic refuses and contaminate vastly, environmentally speaking. People know that this new factory can bring us employs and money, but we also know that, sadly, vegetables, birds and many others animals may die because this plant.
To sum up, we can affirm that contamination in Baños de la Encina is not a very important problem, at least until the factory before quoted install around the village.
Anyway, we and all the rest of people must take care of our earth, we are destroying it, and it is the only we have. Recycling is a good manner to contribute and, mainly, to avoid the pollution insofar as possible.
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Well I am just quickly looking over this while watching some really stupid movie on Comedy Central, but here are some things I noticed.
You use a lot of useless words. I tried to highlight some of them. Did you have to have a certain number of words or something?
In the second paragraph you bring up the brick factories, then you say you can see smoke from your house 10 kilometers away. But you never link the brick factory to the smoke:
Bailén is a bigger town near to Baños de la Encina. People make their living thanks to ceramic and brick factories. These factories create a great amount of toxic gas covering the village. It is ten kilometers far from Baños, but we can see smoke clouds from our homes. Sometimes the air is so thick they can\'t enjoy the sun.
The third paragraph you say your sky is "neat" I would change that to "clean".. I\'ve never heard of a neat sky. I also wouldn\'t say "sky" I would say "air":
On the other hand, our air is clean and our Rumblar River and its marsh are also very well protected, but not all is good in the village due to the widespread crop: the olive. Olives are frail trees that need a lot of chemical products, like fertilizers, disinfectants and others so-called needful products. These toxic treatments do not damage the harvest, but they could harm us. Allergy is a disease that expands quickly thanks to these products. (I never knew allergy was a disease) According to last researches, about 69% of Jaén inhabitants have some kind of allergy related with olive toxic substances. Allergies are not caused by these treatments, but they influence in sakes and multiply the effects several times. (doesn\'t make sense) However, olivescannot live nowadays without these treatments. Producers wish health in their plantations and big harvest, and it only can be obtained by toxic products.
An important chemical company called “Fertiberia” desires to install a plant in Baños. The corporation makes solid fertilizers that are frequently used by US, but their manufacture also makes tons of toxic refuses and contaminate vastly, environmentally speaking. People know that this new factory can bring us employs and money, but we also know that, sadly, vegetables, birds and many others animals may die because this plant.
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