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« on: November 26, 2002, 12:49:43 PM »
Some opinions would be appreciated.

My company is in the process of putting together a set of commercials for a client of ours. The client is a general contracting firm that wanted us to create three commercials using comedy as a theme.

This cut here of the first spot dealing with heating is just about done. *56k\'ers beware!

Can you take a look at it tell me if you find it amusing. I hope you get a chuckle. We\'ve never put together spots in a comedic way before and I want to see if this is funny. I\'ve watched it a hundred times and I am numb to it now.

Btw, the actors are all professional comedians.

Thanks for any comments good or bad.

Ace
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« Reply #1 on: November 27, 2002, 03:15:40 AM »
How about at least one "you suck and your work sucks" to let me know that someone watched the movie.

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« Reply #2 on: November 27, 2002, 03:24:43 AM »
Its funny, but doesn\'t look very professional. It should be the other way around, stupid husband, not stupid wife. Kinda like Home Improvement with Tim Allen.

I dunno, its just not that attention grabbing.
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« Reply #3 on: November 27, 2002, 03:34:15 AM »
Sorry, I tried to watch it but couldn\'t get the streaming to work very well.
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« Reply #4 on: November 27, 2002, 04:26:48 AM »
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Its funny, but doesn\'t look very professional. It should be the other way around, stupid husband, not stupid wife. Kinda like Home Improvement with Tim Allen.

I dunno, its just not that attention grabbing.


yeah add more Profanity & Nudity that will get Joe Public’s Attention

Remember SEX SELLS


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« Reply #5 on: November 27, 2002, 04:36:58 AM »
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Its funny, but doesn\'t look very professional. It should be the other way around, stupid husband, not stupid wife. Kinda like Home Improvement with Tim Allen.

I dunno, its just not that attention grabbing.


When you say it\'s funny but does not look professional, do you mean the quality of the footage or the idea.

Just so you know, we purposely switched the roles around.

Thanks for being honest.

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« Reply #6 on: November 27, 2002, 04:39:42 AM »
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yeah add more Profanity & Nudity that will get Joe Public’s Attention

Remember SEX SELLS


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I know what you mean. We initially had the wife nude in our first version. Worked for me, but my partner was unsure. :)

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« Reply #7 on: November 27, 2002, 04:56:44 PM »
Ace, when I say \'professional\' not necessarily the quality of the footage, but the actual acting, editing, screenplay etc.

Doesn\'t seem like something you would see on TV.
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« Reply #8 on: November 27, 2002, 07:14:03 PM »
Since you asked for honest..

I didn\'t find it remotely funny.  I see you\'re going for simplicity but even I can make up something funnier.  And I see a lot of things in it that is out of whack.  Even if it\'s the very first take.

I\'m sure with your proffession you can handly this kind of criticism. Specially since mine don\'t matter really.
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« Reply #9 on: November 27, 2002, 08:32:53 PM »
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Doesn\'t seem like something you would see on TV.


man you should see some of the local commercials they play in wisconsin some of the worst shit you\'ve ever seen and they\'re all done by the same production company i cant remember thye name luke would know but they play that crap constantly
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« Reply #10 on: November 27, 2002, 08:45:22 PM »
Couple comments:

I also agree the acting is off, but I understand this is low budget so it\'s actually not bad for low budget.

now for the spot itself.
The first sequence is too short.  You need a couple shots of the guy freezing his ass off in the house and the chick struggling to fix it.  Fast paced montage since you have a short spot here.

This would give us a reason to go to the marriage counselor.  Right now you have no reason to get counseled.

And another thing that is bad, I have no clue what you are advertising.  Either a heating company or a counseling service.
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« Reply #11 on: November 27, 2002, 09:57:13 PM »
You guys are rough.

First off, criticism is a good thing. I also realize that I will get a thousand different opinions from a thousand different people.

The spot is done except the VO which will make it clear that the spot is for a general contracting company that can fix your heat.

One thing to remember it is a 30 second spot and Vid is right, the budget is low for a TV commercial.

Now you may all go screw yourselves! J/K!

Thanks! I now must sleep off what will be an incredible hangover in the morning.

Ace
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« Reply #12 on: November 27, 2002, 10:08:23 PM »
It was kinda funny. How about getting the guy to do the cooking. He flips an omellet up and it lands on his wife\'s face. He says "I can fix that!" and whacks her with a pan.

Okay...too Bugs Bunny like.

But the clip you showed....you need to stay on the "door" scene a little longer. I was paying attention to the shadows on the door window and didn\'t have time to see that the sign read "Marriage Counselor". Had to watch it twice. I like it for the most part. :)
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« Reply #13 on: November 27, 2002, 10:11:27 PM »
And instead of "I can\'t get warm." have him say "I feel no warmth!" Sorta like a rocky marriage. :p
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« Reply #14 on: November 28, 2002, 04:42:21 AM »
Oh I like that line Gman.  THat would be good.
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