Originally posted by Kaldertaut
racer your a dork...... this car stinks Cranks Hard Every Valve Rattles Oil Leaks Every Time
Now which error should I point out first? Let us start from the first sentence.
your is hardly in context with the sentence. It should be either
you\'re or
you are.
this car stinks - first of all, the word "this" should have a big letter in front ( "This" ). But this is merely an annoying remark - for it is nothing compared to what is going to follow.
Cranks Hard Every Valve Rattles Oil Leaks Every Time. Oh God. First off, while you forgot to add big letters when they were due, you decided to start every friggin\' word with a big letter in this crippled sentence. An attempt of a sentence. Secondly, it feels like a headless line of words.
This is how I would have written your reply:
Racer, you are a dork... This car stinks. Cranks hard, every valve rattles and oil leaks occur every time.But, alas, I am not you. I should not judge your style - yet I am judging your style. I apologize. I just found your attitude annoying and decided to get annoying myself. But now you know.
